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Hackensack Discussion / Re: My favorite paper is not having a good day
« Last post by BLeafe on October 28, 2017, 02:00:00 PM »
1. Future writing about last night's game = stale news

2. "I was just try   " =  cliffhanger (tune in tomorrow when this doesn't get resolved)





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Hackensack Discussion / Re: My favorite paper is not having a good day
« Last post by BLeafe on October 27, 2017, 11:55:04 AM »
Besides 3 different sections of today's Record, we also have contributions from its local weekly - The Hackensack Chronicle.

1&2. Let's start right off with two versions of something on the front (1A) page. In the straight online version, the caption is exactly where it should be - right under the photo. In the print version, it's about a half a mile away.


3. On the very next page, we find this "sentence". It shows 8 words.......it needs 11, like maybe add "failed to respond" or "did not respond" after "rapper"?


4. On the third page of the Local section, I have a proposition about a preposition: change "to" to "from". "third to the right" means you're starting from the left, while "third from the right" means you're starting from the right. In this particular case, you wind up with the same guy from either direction (in a lineup of 5 people, "3" is always in the middle), but if there were 4 or 6 in the lineup, the result would be different.

Why not just write "(middle)"?


5. On the 6th page of the Local section, a hyphen is missing. It should read "months-old".


6. Only one minor problem in Sports today: change "sat" to "sit".


On to The Chronicle:

7. In a weekly, you obviously can't expect to read only yesterday's news and you might skip the week-old news because it's........well, old news. - you've read it before.

If you go back to my October 5 post, you'll find a mention of my annoyance at the banal phrase, "looks on". THREE WEEKS after the publication of that story, it's the Chronicle's front page story, with the same caption (except they changed "Wednesday" to "Oct 5"). Mom, Mom - still looks on.

Talk about stale news!


8. Slight issue with the word "don". It's a present-tense verb meaning "putting on clothes". These people are not putting on clothes. They presumably donned them at home.

I'm trying to come up with a more appropriate verb to replace "don" in this caption. "Wear" is as boring as "looks on"............how about "sport"? (How about getting a new caption writer for both publications?)



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Hackensack Discussion / Let's build some of these
« Last post by BLeafe on October 27, 2017, 10:41:44 AM »
(or is that we're already potentially doing?)


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Hackensack Discussion / Re: Teterboro Airport
« Last post by Homer Jones on October 26, 2017, 06:29:02 PM »
Canít wait to see all the good folks from Maywood and Rochelle Park coming out to support this new approach.
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Hackensack Discussion / Re: My favorite paper is not having a good day
« Last post by BLeafe on October 26, 2017, 11:38:34 AM »
1. The comma isn't needed and change "are" to "is" (unless "Atlanta are off to a shaky start" sounds right to you).


2.  Unnecessary hyphen should not be there.


3. What a great photo this would be: 3 large men sitting in a sideline seat! With their salaries, you'd think each could afford his own seat.  ;)


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Hackensack Videos / Re: WHAT emergency?
« Last post by Skipx219 on October 26, 2017, 07:54:41 AM »
Teaneck was testing their emergency alert system installed to warn of derailment or fire on the RR tracks carrying Bacun Oil. A family member of yours ran the test. Give him a call.  :)
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Hackensack Videos / Ebb & Flow (shot from my living room)
« Last post by BLeafe on October 25, 2017, 04:50:41 PM »
What waterway could this be and what causes the sudden reversals in direction?

Actually, the reversals are wind-caused and the waterway becomes clear at the end..........and it's only about a year old and was selected by my landlord...........hence, the "high quality".






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Hackensack Videos / WHAT emergency?
« Last post by BLeafe on October 25, 2017, 04:15:09 PM »
It's been a pretty normal day, until I started hearing these loud announcements outside my window this morning - always with the same 3 statements, repeated twice more each time:

"The emergency is over. All Clear. Resume normal activities."

I've probably heard them at least 10 times over the last 5 or 6 hours.

No one seems to know anything about any sort of emergency around here.

Since I always missed recording the beginning of the first of the 3 repetitions, I combined two videos to simulate what each announcement sounded like.

Like I said.............a normal day in Hackensack.







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Hackensack Discussion / Re: My favorite paper is not having a good day
« Last post by BLeafe on October 25, 2017, 01:40:01 PM »
Not too bad today: one misspelling and one slightly-odd caption.

1. The Jets' GM is Mike Maccagnan - not Maccaganan.

2. "...second from bottom right..." in this caption implies that there are identifiable people in the upper part of the picture. There aren't. "...second from right..." is all that's needed.


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