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Hackensack Discussion / Re: My favorite paper is not having a good day
« on: October 29, 2017, 01:25:30 PM »
Why, why, why, why................

1&2. This symbol is used in connection with unidentified currency. Why was it used 3 times in this story? (click to enlarge if the symbol is too small in the story) And why is there no comma after "Of course"?

3. Why is "joined" capitalized?

4. Why isn't "storm-proofing" hyphenated in this front-page secondary headline?

Hackensack Discussion / Re: Tracking the 395 Main St rehab project
« on: October 29, 2017, 01:15:07 PM »
The asbestos remediation is done and a fence just went up around the project.

Can demolition be far behind?

This is a 4-photo stitch. Click to enlarge and scroll from the left.

Hackensack Discussion / Re: My favorite paper is not having a good day
« on: October 28, 2017, 02:00:00 PM »
1. Future writing about last night's game = stale news

2. "I was just try   " =  cliffhanger (tune in tomorrow when this doesn't get resolved)

Hackensack Discussion / Re: My favorite paper is not having a good day
« on: October 27, 2017, 11:55:04 AM »
Besides 3 different sections of today's Record, we also have contributions from its local weekly - The Hackensack Chronicle.

1&2. Let's start right off with two versions of something on the front (1A) page. In the straight online version, the caption is exactly where it should be - right under the photo. In the print version, it's about a half a mile away.

3. On the very next page, we find this "sentence". It shows 8 needs 11, like maybe add "failed to respond" or "did not respond" after "rapper"?

4. On the third page of the Local section, I have a proposition about a preposition: change "to" to "from". "third to the right" means you're starting from the left, while "third from the right" means you're starting from the right. In this particular case, you wind up with the same guy from either direction (in a lineup of 5 people, "3" is always in the middle), but if there were 4 or 6 in the lineup, the result would be different.

Why not just write "(middle)"?

5. On the 6th page of the Local section, a hyphen is missing. It should read "months-old".

6. Only one minor problem in Sports today: change "sat" to "sit".

On to The Chronicle:

7. In a weekly, you obviously can't expect to read only yesterday's news and you might skip the week-old news because it's........well, old news. - you've read it before.

If you go back to my October 5 post, you'll find a mention of my annoyance at the banal phrase, "looks on". THREE WEEKS after the publication of that story, it's the Chronicle's front page story, with the same caption (except they changed "Wednesday" to "Oct 5"). Mom, Mom - still looks on.

Talk about stale news!

8. Slight issue with the word "don". It's a present-tense verb meaning "putting on clothes". These people are not putting on clothes. They presumably donned them at home.

I'm trying to come up with a more appropriate verb to replace "don" in this caption. "Wear" is as boring as "looks on" about "sport"? (How about getting a new caption writer for both publications?)

Hackensack Discussion / Let's build some of these
« on: October 27, 2017, 10:41:44 AM »
(or is that we're already potentially doing?)

Hackensack Discussion / Re: My favorite paper is not having a good day
« on: October 26, 2017, 11:38:34 AM »
1. The comma isn't needed and change "are" to "is" (unless "Atlanta are off to a shaky start" sounds right to you).

2.  Unnecessary hyphen should not be there.

3. What a great photo this would be: 3 large men sitting in a sideline seat! With their salaries, you'd think each could afford his own seat.  ;)

Hackensack Videos / Ebb & Flow (shot from my living room)
« on: October 25, 2017, 04:50:41 PM »
What waterway could this be and what causes the sudden reversals in direction?

Actually, the reversals are wind-caused and the waterway becomes clear at the end..........and it's only about a year old and was selected by my landlord...........hence, the "high quality".

Hackensack Videos / WHAT emergency?
« on: October 25, 2017, 04:15:09 PM »
It's been a pretty normal day, until I started hearing these loud announcements outside my window this morning - always with the same 3 statements, repeated twice more each time:

"The emergency is over. All Clear. Resume normal activities."

I've probably heard them at least 10 times over the last 5 or 6 hours.

No one seems to know anything about any sort of emergency around here.

Since I always missed recording the beginning of the first of the 3 repetitions, I combined two videos to simulate what each announcement sounded like.

Like I said.............a normal day in Hackensack.

Hackensack Discussion / Re: My favorite paper is not having a good day
« on: October 25, 2017, 01:40:01 PM »
Not too bad today: one misspelling and one slightly-odd caption.

1. The Jets' GM is Mike Maccagnan - not Maccaganan.

2. "...second from bottom right..." in this caption implies that there are identifiable people in the upper part of the picture. There aren't. "...second from right..." is all that's needed.

Hackensack Discussion / Concrete Cutters
« on: October 24, 2017, 05:40:02 PM »
1. I saw this from my living room this morning behind 50 Passaic St.

2. No clue as to what was going on until I saw these two wheeling each piece around the corner to..........a dumpster? (I can't see too well around the corners of a building). One guy's shirt says, "S&J Concrete Cutting". The door was open in the back of 50 Passaic, so it appears that all these concrete slabs were cut out of the building's interior. Maybe they can recycle them as tombstones.

3. This slab fell off the second after I took this. You can see that it's not positioned correctly.

4. And this guy took away the leftover small stuff.

Click to enlarge.

Hackensack Discussion / Re: My favorite paper is not having a good day
« on: October 24, 2017, 12:00:00 PM »
1. In fewer words, pluses = minuses.

2. Read the first paragraph. Shouldn't the second paragraph begin with something like, "It's quite another thing to..."?

ALSO: "...patience over impulsive..."? Noun over adjective? Wouldn't "impulse" or "impulsiveness" fit better?

3. How did "returning" become "retraining"?

Unlike in the print edition, there's no space here between "21" and "snaps".

4. Who can forget when Ron Artest changed his name to Metta World Peace? Here's your answer.

Hackensack Discussion / Re: My favorite paper is not having a good day
« on: October 23, 2017, 12:39:58 PM »
One or two (or thirteen) little items today:

1. "...the he New York Post..."?

2. "The was the recurring  theme..."?

3. "And ti was a total team effort." (There's no "ti" in "team".)

4. "...Girardi..." what? "said"? A paper isn't doing much informing when it makes its readers guess.

5. Initially, the only thing to fix was a missing "of" before the last two words, but when I jumped from the print edition to the straight online edition, "sea-son" popped it (it had been split properly between sentences in the print edition).

6. "...will now assembling..."?

7. Shouldn't there be an "I" before "love"?

8. If you make mistakes, you make (or create) blunders - you don't take them (read the line before it). Would you say, "I took a mistake" if you made one?

9. Taking out the "along with linebacker Darron Lee" part, you have a sentence that reads, "Then he gave let Stills get loose for the game-tying touchdown."  Oy.

10. & 11. These are from two different stories by the same writer on the same page. I've included the next line of each story to show that they are, indeed, from two different stories. I'm seeing more and more of this type of repetition from the same respected writer lately, but he never did this in the Borg days, so I'm guessing that someone is fooling around with his stories.

And to think.........before I saw the larger picture, I was only going to post these because of one word: "entangle". The officials weren't waiting for the players to entangle - they were already entangled. The word that both stories needed was "untangle".

12. The second of those two stories finished with backwards game-scoring (darker print). Why would anyone consider this to be a good idea?

13. After those dozen doozies, we head over to the Better Living section and a story about diners.

"Why they are an icon"? Why is plural singular? "Why they are iconic" might be better. And why doesn't the last sentence end with a question mark? Is it not a question?

Online Auctions/Local Images (Moderated by BLeafe) / Seen on eBay
« on: October 22, 2017, 07:52:06 PM »
Some of the more interesting Hackensack images seen on eBay today:

Click to enlarge.

Hackensack Discussion / Re: My favorite paper is not having a good day
« on: October 22, 2017, 01:15:01 PM »
1. Well, lookee here - they finally got it "unnecessary" games questions.

Back to getting it wrong:

2. "COULD"

3. Splitting an unsplittable word

4. "GAMES"

5. "MEANT"


Hackensack Discussion / Re: My favorite paper is not having a good day
« on: October 21, 2017, 01:15:00 PM »
Let's start with an interesting video from The Record that was sent to me by fellow member Homer Jones. Actually, it's the title over the video that draws your attention because it declares that there's a new county in New Jersey:

"Pedestrian crashes spur crackdown in Paterson county"

See for yourself:

Today's gremlins:

1. I guess redundant credit is better than no credit at all...........BUT IT'S STILL REDUNDANT!

2. Some space cadet left one out.

3. Speaking of space cadets, another one thinks that Game 7 in a series that's tied at 3 games apiece might not be necessary. Can somebody please explain how the postseason works to whoever creates these "helpful" schedules?

4. There's a very "TELLing" omission in this sentence.

5. It seems that every Record writer is confused about the use of "and" followed by a comma. Here's when it should be used:

...when "and" is being used to coordinate two independent clauses. An independent clause is a group of words that has a subject and a verb and can stand alone as a sentence. In the following example, the independent clauses are in brackets:

    [Miguel took piano lessons for sixteen years], and [today he is an accomplished performer].

The use of the comma would also apply when any of the seven coordinating conjunctions (and, but, or, nor, for, so, yet) join two independent clauses.

Notice in the next example that we do not use a comma before "and" because it does not join two independent clauses but merely joins two verbs:

    Miguel took piano lessons for sixteen years and today is an accomplished performer.

Here we have only one independent clause—two verbs ("took" and "is") but one subject ("Miguel").

In two different articles on the same page (5S), the same writer was really confused, using both versions multiple times - some right and some wrong - but never with any consistency. I'm not posting the articles because it's too time-consuming to list all the similar problems, it would take up too much space and you don't really care.

6. I'd rather take up too much space with something else because The Record took up too much space in printing a story yesterday about a former Bergen Catholic quarterback from Hillsdale named Tanner McEvoy who is returning to the area as a wide receiver for the Seattle Seahawks when they play the Giants this Sunday at MetLife Stadium. They reprinted it again today - albeit somewhat shorter - with the same picture (to fill up space?).

Basically, they took a writer's story and sliced out a couple of paragraphs (to fit the space?). What remains is not rewritten and the byline is the same...............essentially, it's verbatim filler.

Of the last three images, the first two are from yesterday and the third one is from today.

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